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Shannon Vanne's avatar

Wow... language be dawned, that was rough. Damn, I have nothing... and that says everything.

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Marissa Purdum's avatar

This is definitely one of the harder ones to read. Thank you for reading it! Hope it didn’t put a damper on your holiday lol

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Shannon Vanne's avatar

It's fine, it's just fiction (I hope). Take a breath and move on to the next story. Better than football. Hats off to you for a really powerful piece.

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Marissa Purdum's avatar

Yes yes, just fiction, in my case anyways.

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Ari Brin's avatar

Extremely sad and disturbing! But I think you nailed what you were going for. I want the best for Carly!

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Marissa Purdum's avatar

Thank you so much! ☺️

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Beautiful structure. Counting the years (I'm thinking of the Sunflower story) was/is a bit of a leitmotif for you? The opening gave me enough detail for the ending to make sense without giving away the story's horrific secret.

Old story or new?

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Marissa Purdum's avatar

Old that I spent some time re-editing this go around

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Marissa Purdum's avatar

Thank you very much!

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